【第 1 段建议】: 1. "In Full Swing"应为" in full swing"（小写首字母）。 2. "Vertical Shaft lmpact Crusher"中的"lmpact"应为"Impact"（字母错误，"l"应为"I"）。 3. "Hydrocyclone"中的"Hydrocyclone"和"Flotation Machine"之间缺少逗号。 4. "Bulk Material Handling"和"Tunnel Boring Machine"之间缺少换行。 请根据以上问题进行修改。 --- 【第 2 段建议】: 1. "Canton Fair 2024 is In Full Swing!" - "In" should be "in" (capitalize only for sentence start). 2. "Canton Fair 2024 is now in full swing, SBM will persist in showcasing until April 19th." - There should be a period (.) or a conjunction (and) before "SBM" to connect the two independent clauses properly. 3. "Demand(multiple):" - There should be a space between "Demand" and "(multiple):". 4. "Materials (brochures, catalogs）" - The closing parenthesis should be a standard parenthesis ")", not a Chinese character "）". 5. "9626 Shanghai Shibang Machinery Sales Co., Ltd." - The copyright year should be 2024, not 2026.